Comment on the best bits: Some very clean shots and very good hand held work. The camera positions are excellent. An excellent edit. Good use of sound. Nice use of light in the establishing shot, and down the passageway.
Things you can improve: Hand held work has to be better still: that's a challenge rather than a criticism
Marks are out of 3 for this:
0 means you haven't done it.
1 is lowest - it means that there is a lot that needs to be done, but that you have the material to sort it out and make it work.
2 means that you've done the job competently and it is OK.
3 means that you've done some parts of it really very well, and should work to exploit this.
Medium Shot MS 3
Long Shot LS 3
Close Up CU 3
XLS - extreme long shot 2
XCU - extreme close up 2
Cross focus 1
Deep focus 2
Tracking shot (dolly, hand held, shoulder shot) 3
Point of View - POV 2
Use of tripod 2
Shot - reverse shot 2
Establishing shot 3
Total out of 55 = 41 = 76% = B
Evaluation is very good, so 9/10, = A